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Broken, shattered, sharp-edged pieces
of clouded mirror glass.

I am so simple yet so complex
with too many emotions inside.

I hate who I appear to be
as well as who I hide.

I spoke vicious words to myself
and before sleeping last night, cried.

I allowed myself to go and break all I could,
then afterward- I just sighed.

Everyone asked me what happened
I told them a story, I lied.

I enforce so many laws upon myself
that I want to, but refuse to abide.

I caused a great anger towards me,
so happiness, I was denied.

I thought the terror wouldn't last forever,
but it has, and I'm done. I tried.

Broken, shattered, sharp-edged pieces
of clouded mirror glass.

That's all I am to myself
as I look at my faces in mass.

Jagged and haunted,
mocking and taunted;

I am only the bad luck
that lasts forever from

broken, shattered, sharp-edged pieces
of clouded mirror glass.
for the a contest the Scribblists group. the prompt was... compare your relationship with someone to an object..... feel free to interpret this how you wish...... so i compared my relationship with myself to a broken mirror. 0.o i hope you all like.
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gateau-de-quatre-17 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2011
this is both awesome and depressing, very nice :D
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xinsanefreakx Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011
:D Thankyou! I super appreciate the comment :icondancingsquirrel:
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michinyuja Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2011  Professional Writer
really good.
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xinsanefreakx Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2011
Why thanxchu! (sorry for the super late reply.)
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04belgarion2k7 Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. This is powerful stuff, I love the short stanzas, the broken punctuation and the odd, bague rhyme scheme...all adds to the message you're trying to get across. Fantastic!

Edit: I let myself go and broke all I could,
then afterward- I just sighed.

Makes more sense, gramatically.

Good work!
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xinsanefreakx Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2011
:D Why thankyou! I believe you read it differently than I meant it. I was thinking along the lines of i allowed myself to go break stuff, and not i let myself go. and went and broke things. But I see how that could be confusing! Thank you so much for the advice. I think I'll edit it to.....

I allowed myself to go and break all I could,
then afterward- I just sighed.

I think this makes more sense and gets my meaning out better. thanks again for the help :iconimhappyspinplz:
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04belgarion2k7 Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
No worries! It's a good piece, and OK I see what you meant by that line. Cool, keep it up! :D
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xinsanefreakx Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2011
:icondancingsquirrel: (i like my icons.) and yay! I shall.
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GummyBearKar Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Omg, this is AMAZING!!! And hits very close to home. :( :hug:
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xinsanefreakx Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2011
Thank you! :tighthug:
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